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Guitargasm! A Novel. Part Two

author: Nolan Whyte date: 10/17/2007 category: junkyard
rating: 8.7 / votes: 57 

On Monday morning Danny drags his ass out of bed and gets ready for school. He catches the bus, which takes him on a slow tour of the warehouse district before crossing into the residential neighborhood that host McLaughlin Collegiate. It's a cool fall morning and Danny can see his breath as he walks across the lawn to the front steps where his friend Kev is waiting for him.

Danny and Kev are a lot alike: neither of them really give a shit about anything except being left alone to play video games, smoke the occasional joint and laugh at all the fools who want to work their asses off to "get somewhere" or "make it." The pretty clones that populate the halls and classes of McLaughlin talking about their Facebook and MySpace pages get a lot of whispered abuse from these two. Kev and Danny don't carry cell phones and they couldn't give a shit about sports, celebrity culture or really anything except themselves.

Kev gets up when he sees Danny coming. While Danny has a plain grey t-shirt on under his jacket, Kev has an over-sized black Slipknot t-shirt on over his hooded sweatshirt. This summarizes one major difference between the two friends: where Danny doesn't care or pay attention to music, it's one of Kev's key interests.

"Hey man."

"Hey."

They walk up the steps and into the school. Kev asks Danny what he did on the weekend, and Danny tells him about going to see his brother Jay's band Hellakill.

"Right, Hellakill,Kev says. “Were they playing an all-ages show somewhere?"

"No," says Danny. "It was at The Station. Jay snuck me in through the back door."

"The Station? Sweet! Was it full of chicks?"

"Yeah, there were some chicks."

Kev nods. "Awesome. They get like, real bands at that place. Not just crap local bands, but bands on tour. Too bad you were there to see Hellakill."

"What's wrong with that?" Danny asks as they stop in front of his locker. He begins fiddling with his lock.

"Well, no offence man, but they're pretty much an emo band. I saw them last summer at that outdoor concert at Leish Park, and all their songs were like, 'I'm angry because of this,' or 'I'm sad because of that.' All they do is sing about their feelings. It's emo."

Danny pulls open his locker and grabs his books. "I thought emo was like all, cry-baby type stuff. Like, whining voices and shit like that." He slams the locker shut and they continue walking.

"Yeah," Kev says, "It's all talking about feelings and stuff. That’s Hellakill. They’re emo."

Danny shrugs. "Nah, I don't think so. You're saying any band that talks about feelings is emo? What about metal bands that are all like, 'I hate you and I'm going to kill you.' That's emo too, right? Because hate is a feeling."

Kev shakes his head. "No, because it's not a wimp feeling. Being angry because someone broke your heart is a wimp feeling, and that’s what Hellakill is like. Sorry dude.

"They are emo to the extreme-o."

"What about Slipknot?" Danny says, pointing to Kev's shirt. "Are they emo too?"

"Hell no. They talk about being insane, not about being sad."

"Well, that's an emotion too. They’re emo."

Kev stops walking and takes a deep breath. "Look," he says, "I know you're just saying Slipknot is emo to get back at me for saying your brother's band is emo. I would like to point out that there are people living in America today that would kill you for saying Slipknot is emo. They are not emo, and being insane is a mental condition, not an emotion."

"Okay dude, whatever. Calm down."

"I want you to say that Slipknot isn't emo."

"Okay, Slipknot isn't emo. Shit, look how mad you got,Danny says with a grin. “You're all worked up. You know who's emo, Kev? You're emo."

Kev laughs and shakes his head. "I'm not emo." He points to a student wearing tight jeans and huge sunglasses. "He's emo."

The two part ways and Danny walks into his math class. He sits down next to a kid named Doug and gives him a try. "Hey Doug, do you know what emo is?"

"Emo music?" Doug says. "Isn't that where the guys have hair in their face and eye makeup and shit?"

"Oh, like Barry."

Two rows over a kid with black hair and eyeliner turns around. "I'm not emo, you stupid asshole! I'm goth."

"Oh. Sorry, Barry."

"Yeah, sorry." Doug looks back at Danny. "Why do you ask, anyway?"

"Kev said my brother's band is emo."

"Right." Doug laughs. "Kev thinks every band in the world except for Slipknot is emo. What kind of music does your brother play?"

"I don't know. Rock, I guess."

Danny spends the rest of the day thinking about Jay's offer: Jay will teach him to play guitar and then Danny can try out for the vacant spot in Hellakill's lineup. It sounds pretty simple, except that Danny knows how many years Jay spent mastering the instrument. He took lessons, and for years when Danny was sitting in the living room playing on an ever-changing series of video game consoles, Jay was sitting in his room practicing.

One thing that had never interested Danny was spending time practicing something, unless it involved a hand-held controller and kick-ass graphics.

A little after four Danny arrives at the forty year old bungalow in Millenburgh’s eastern suburbs where he and his family live. It’s too early for his parents to be home from work, but the screechy noise of an electric guitar coming from the basement tells him that Jay is home. Danny decides what the hell, drops his bag, and heads down the stairs.

Jeff and Cheryl Warren, Jay and Danny’s parents, bought the house twenty years ago, but they never got around to finishing the basement. The concrete floor is covered by ill-fitting pieces of carpet and the walls are covered with unpainted drywall. The space is divided into two rooms: the laundry area and the work area, where Jeff Warren stores his tools and where Jay practices the guitar.

Usually Danny doesn’t bother going down there unless it’s to wash his clothes, but he heads down and finds Jay sitting on a folding chair facing his amp, strumming on his guitar. When Danny comes in Jay puts his fingers against the strings, silencing the electric instrument.

Hey man,Jay says. “What’s up?

Nothing,Danny says. "I came for a freezie.

I don’t think we have any.

Danny heads into the laundry room and opens the freezer. He knows they don’t have any freezies, but he looks anyway. Nope. He walks back into the work area and leans against the wall. “Go ahead, play something,” he says to Jay.

What do you want me to play?Jay asks. “I’ll try and do something you know. What’s your favorite band?

I don’t know,Danny says. “There were some good songs on the last Tony Hawk game, but I don’t know who the bands are.

Yeah, but don’t you have a favorite band? Isn’t there any band you like?

Danny shrugs. “Slipknot, I guess.

Jay adjusts a knob on his amp and begins strumming softly. “Slipknot? I thought that was Kev’s favorite band.

Danny doesn’t answer.

Here, how about this,Jay says, and he adjusts the knob again. He grabs the neck of the guitar and belts out a riff, three notes going up and then back down: “Duh-duh, di-di-Dah, Dah di-di di-di, Duh-duh.” He plays it over a few times, stops, and looks up at his younger brother. “You know that one, right?

Yeah, I recognize it. I’ve heard it on TV and stuff.

It’s ‘Satisfaction’ by The Stones. You could play that. It’s just three notes. Watch.” He plays it over again, more slowly this time.

Yeah, I could play that after like, five years of practice.

It’s just three notes. It’s not that hard. I could teach you. Shit, I can’t believe you don’t know that song. Are you really that clueless about music?

Oh, kiss my ass,Danny says, and he turns to walk up the stairs.

Hold on, hold on,Jay says. “No joking around. Do you want me to teach you, or what?

Maybe,Danny says. “Um, you guys play rock, right?

Yeah. Well, we play whatever we want, but yeah, we’re a rock band. We’re not quite metal. Hard rock, I guess.

So you’re not emo, then.

Jay snorts. “No. We’re not disco either. Who told you we’re emo?

Danny shakes his head. “Never mind. Can you show me how to play that song?

Um.Jay looks at the guitar in his hands. “You’re right handed. This one is lefty. I’ll have to borrow a guitar from Tyson for you, okay? I’ll see him tomorrow night. That cool?

Danny nods. “Yeah. Cool.” He turns and heads back upstairs. Ten minutes later he’s lost on a World War Two battlefield, game controller in his hands.

2007 © Nolan Whyte

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:20 am + print this article + mail to a friend
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 115 
 comments posted
Madmax25 :
Great. Keeps getting better and better.

Woohoo! 1st! ;

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 11:13 am / quote |
sam i am :
Hooray. I think I prefer this to In the Van, but it's probably too early to judge.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 11:30 am / quote |
thejester :
interested to see where this is going
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 11:30 am / quote |
Mky :
Looking forward to the next parts!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 11:35 am / quote |
zerodeck :
keep on writing! lol about the emopart
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 12:05 pm / quote |
Rungej :
YES
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 12:13 pm / quote |
lexaah :
it r sexeh!!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 12:31 pm / quote |
Jonjy2 :
Woot. Where is meh number threee!? xD Keep it up, its fun xD
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 12:37 pm / quote |
Gab_Chris :
go for it and make a book out of it
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 12:51 pm / quote |
i.am.akim :
nice one.. i cant wait for next..
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 01:03 pm / quote |
jiminizzle :
nice. Kinda funny too.

good stuff

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 01:03 pm / quote |
JakSunPlayr :
Mr. Whyte is back with a new story. Great!!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 01:08 pm / quote |
FlamingYouth :
i like where this is going...
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 01:38 pm / quote |
FlamingYouth :
"They are emo to the extreme-o."


jaja

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 01:38 pm / quote |
shyalicia :
nice
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 02:01 pm / quote |
blazingchaz :
This one rocks! I'm addicted to this now! Post more quickly!!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 02:27 pm / quote |
Sh*tPump :
I love it
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 02:30 pm / quote |
pucci6d6 :
MORE MORE!!
i love this
anyone know if he has written other novels?
and where to find them
great writer

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 02:50 pm / quote |
aceofspades10 :
the first half reminded me of some kids arguing in The Pit, lol.

great story, tho.

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 02:52 pm / quote |
noahthelemon :
awsome story!!! just got to the end and was like NOO PLEASE BE LONGER! lol cant wait till the next part
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 03:04 pm / quote |
TheUnholy :
I have been moderately critical of Mr Whyte in previous columns, but I have to say the dialogue section in this really did ring true, an observant little comment on the kind of boring genre-obsessed kids who you see all the time. A highlight amidst another decent episode
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 03:06 pm / quote |
DTownIndy :
Keep it coming. Great read!!!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 03:24 pm / quote |
MINI_METAL_MAN :
keep it up theses are awsome
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 03:50 pm / quote |
element4433 :
HAHA I love the making fun of the kids that call everything emo
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 03:52 pm / quote |
diddly14 :
ONLY THING IV READ IN YEARS!!!

AWSOME STUFF

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:00 pm / quote |
swinghead :
good
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:09 pm / quote |
danmanstx :
moar! this stuff is awesome!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:09 pm / quote |
edibledevilboy :
how many times was the word emo said in this?...
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:21 pm / quote |
Fyre Deity :
"Hey Doug, do you know what emo is?"

"Emo music?" Doug says. "Isn't that where the guys have hair in their face and eye makeup and shit?"

"Oh, like Barry."

Two rows over a kid with black hair and eyeliner turns around. "I'm not emo, you stupid *******! I'm goth."

"Oh. Sorry, Barry."


I imagined that one goth kid from SouthPark right there. :haha

Great Stuff Nolan, once again.

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:29 pm / quote |
GuitaPlaya :
Slipknot fans, tisk, tisk, tisk
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:54 pm / quote |
blaze2thekings :
this sounds like a present day 90210
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 04:59 pm / quote |
martyr1130 :
Dude, in the van was awesome, and so is this, and i might actually like the story line in this better, so dont stop writing!!!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 05:11 pm / quote |
simonzwaan :
Not bad writing style
Glad you mentioned emo is NOT a genre
because then you can generalize every band as emo
because every music has emotion.

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 05:18 pm / quote |
GrungePb :
sam i am wrote:

Hooray. I think I prefer this to In the Van, but it's probably too early to judge.


so far im still all about in the van, i guess this one will relate more with people on the site since its younger musicians rather then a 40 year old still trying to make it

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 06:36 pm / quote |
count schizo :
You rock Nolan! Keep'em coming.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 06:40 pm / quote |
Glen'sHeroicAct :
very nice... i'm liking how you're starting this one off with the main character being portrayed as a flawed, very real, person; in comeback road you kinda started it off without putting a lot of personality into terry (think that's it, it's been a while). you're developing this character a lot in the beginning, which will help suck us in faster, as well as make the story itself interesting as personalities clash and previous character development acts to change the events in the story. in comeback road there'd sometimes be arguments where we'd have to go "woah! where did that come from? i didn't know terry had such a short fuse!" in this one, i think the characters are going to be developed more, so those sort of things don't happen.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 06:41 pm / quote |
shuriken :
Gab_Chris wrote:

go for it and make a book out of it


Put all the stories [Guitargasm, In the Van, and the other one] together in a collection
The Fiction Works of Nolan Whyte

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 06:47 pm / quote |
GuitarHero1081 :
"They are emo to the extreme-o."


>_

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 07:55 pm / quote |
Matt Chavie :
You should let me proof read the next one, it is an awesome story. PM if you want me too.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 07:58 pm / quote |
CrossBack7 :
shuriken wrote:

Gab_Chris wrote:

go for it and make a book out of it

Put all the stories [Guitargasm, In the Van, and the other one] together in a collection
The Fiction Works of Nolan Whyte


Good idea, I'd buy it. Good stuff, keep it coming.

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 08:01 pm / quote |
Dvnc :
publish it!
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 08:02 pm / quote |
dsotm73 :
sweeeeet.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 08:15 pm / quote |
mack attack :
awesome I came in just at the end of comeback and re-read it when I saw the guitargasm story starting, keep it up
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 09:07 pm / quote |
orion284 :
i came in at like 15 of comeback and loved it. this one's pretty amazing too. don't stop writing
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 09:50 pm / quote |
DarK666SiM :
Wow... Thats exactly me and my brother...

POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:14 pm / quote |
shut_up_n00b :
I wanna have your babies. :p:
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:39 pm / quote |
The_Man_IV :
"Kev stops walking and takes a deep breath. "Look," he says, "I know you're just saying Slipknot is emo to get back at me for saying your brother's band is emo. I would like to point out that there are people living in America today that would kill you for saying Slipknot is emo. They are not emo, and being insane is a mental condition, not an emotion."


Awh ha lol Only the truth there


POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:44 pm / quote |
led_zep_00 :
Yeah, I could see this going over better than ITVOTCR 'cause a lot of the people on here are in this age group.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:46 pm / quote |
TooFast :
Lame.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 10:53 pm / quote |
jthm_guitarist :
This is a lot better than part one.
POSTED: 10/17/2007 - 11:29 pm / quote |
Deanslinger :
great depth

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:18 am / quote |
deadkenedy :
The whole 'emo' argument reminded me way too much of 13 year olds. It may be true, but it was pointless. This story is shit, seriously you must be like 12.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:22 am / quote |
tai1221 :
deadkenedy wrote:

The whole 'emo' argument reminded me way too much of 13 year olds. It may be true, but it was pointless. This story is shit, seriously you must be like 12.
thats kinda mean, your the only one to leave a comment like that, i guess your really cool, goin against the norm and stuff....

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:46 am / quote |
wasp2020 :
Ha, wasn't crazy about the first chapter, but this one was great. The genre discussion was really great, very real (all the dialogue is reminding me of Judd Apatow's movies, which is fantastic), and the differences of Jay and Danny was even better. Jay reminds me of my brother, playing video games all the time while I play guitar - and I'd say something like "Come on, it's just three notes!", it'd go just like that. Very cool. Very cool indeed. Really want to see where it goes now.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:51 am / quote |
Rhythm__Guitar :
Great Writing. Satisfaction was the first song I learnt to play aswell.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:54 am / quote |
mr barnicals :
hah i bet kev and danny will have a fight. awesome writing dude keep it up, cant wait for the next
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 02:13 am / quote |
HAdwan :
Fantastic! the whole emo genre arguement was brilliant. keep it up (and quicker between posts if you could )
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 02:31 am / quote |
deadkenedy :
thats kinda mean, your the only one to leave a comment like that, i guess your really cool, goin against the norm and stuff....


Dude, its what i thought, the whole story just seemed kind of juvenile. I'm not gonna change what i thought about it.

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 05:04 am / quote |
EdawMail :
you've got it all down to a teeeee
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 05:19 am / quote |
schecter-omen6 :
Dude i take back the comments i made last time this really is amazing look forward to reading the rest of it keep it coming :]
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 06:38 am / quote |
MurderousIntent :
i love your writing...i hate waiting lol but i guess i have to ....anyone know any similar type stories...like about music and bands?? not biographies tho...any help appreciated
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 06:49 am / quote |
WildthingJR :
deadkenedy wrote:

thats kinda mean, your the only one to leave a comment like that, i guess your really cool, goin against the norm and stuff....

Dude, its what i thought, the whole story just seemed kind of juvenile. I'm not gonna change what i thought about it.


Maybe because it's about a bunch of kids..

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 08:41 am / quote |
icyblue :
this is entertaining stuff. Good job, keep it up!
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 08:52 am / quote |
callum2903 :
nice
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 11:09 am / quote |
fadetowhite :
I LOVE THIS AND SLIPKNOT SUCKS! DONT THINK IM DUMB AND NARROW MINDED. i wonder how long dannys going to take to learn guitar
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 12:22 pm / quote |
RadioMuse :
Well done; however I have one point:

A guitar is a hand-held controller and the crowds at shows are better than awesome graphics: they're real.

But anyway...

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 12:23 pm / quote |
-metalhead- :
I do enjoy reading this, but if youre gonna publish, keep the novel name in mind.

Its pretty annoying...

But anyway, keep it up!XP

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:04 pm / quote |
Set-Abominae :
Loving it man. Keep em coming.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 01:39 pm / quote |
Lgndkllr777 :
Ugh Kevin reminds me of a kid I know. lol.

Nice Story!

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 02:05 pm / quote |
LauIsSedated :
it's so bland

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 02:19 pm / quote |
hamish5178 :
While I do enjoy reading this story (it's like porn, but with guitars!), I think the kids that commented calling him an awesome writer need to read more. . .


POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 02:45 pm / quote |
guitaringsailor :
Shit nolan is going to change the guitar world completely! now i actually will have to learn how to read, it's not just tabs =D
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 04:36 pm / quote |
deathbyawesome :
sam i am wrote:

Hooray. I think I prefer this to In the Van, but it's probably too early to judge.

I agree

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 05:12 pm / quote |
mellowyellow729 :
i like it... reminds me a lot of me and my brother's relationship except were both music geeks...
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 05:15 pm / quote |
minichibi :
Kool ^-^

+1 mellowyellow, except my brother SAYS he loves music, but he really doesnt.

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 05:22 pm / quote |
fireblade :
Cool
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 06:34 pm / quote |
qotsa1998 :
this is really good. ur a good writer, try to get one of ur stories out as a book perhapse. The main character is alot like the normal high-school kid. smokes some, doesnt really care about much, might one day here a song he likes and finally gets introduced to a guitar. then he becomes more active in some things, which is good. i cant wait to read it, its really relevant for me since im a freshman in HS and know a humongous Slipknot fan.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 08:03 pm / quote |
caucasian_ninja :
Does anyone else picture South Park characters during the emo discussion?! Haha...

Good stuff though. Excellent.

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 08:32 pm / quote |
FDream Theater :
well let's try with this..

when "In The Van" finished I was emotionally disturbed

POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 08:45 pm / quote |
Sloopy :
I really liked the premise of Van better, this story just sounds childish.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 10:13 pm / quote |
noahray :
what the hell, i'm almost positive "Kev" is some ****ing kid on this site, i've seen that discussion too many times here to be coincidence.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 10:35 pm / quote |
AestheticSelkie :
I like this.
POSTED: 10/18/2007 - 11:51 pm / quote |
XzX_Patrick_XzX :
nice story man i like this, can't wait for a third and many to follow
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 12:57 am / quote |
ginjaninja :
hehe.....slipknot
hehe.....emo

POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 04:36 am / quote |
bassmanjoe08 :
I cant beleive you cant find a publisher. Sure, the stories would have to be lengthened, but still, Id buy them.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 07:02 am / quote |
the_edge17 :
Cool, thats pretty good! It would be cool if you done this big ...20 years later... and Danny becomes better than Jay BUT!! They are in 2 big bands and they have a guitar battle on stage, now THATS entertainment lol...keep up the good work man!!
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 08:01 am / quote |
TooFast :
deadkenedy wrote:

thats kinda mean, your the only one to leave a comment like that, i guess your really cool, goin against the norm and stuff....

Dude, its what i thought, the whole story just seemed kind of juvenile. I'm not gonna change what i thought about it.

+1

POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 09:27 am / quote |
archie123 :
this is extremely boring. the guys were described as some misfits who dont give a shit about anything, but later they talk like damn geeks. an nothing fun happens. you can hear such discussions in real life often and that is an issue raped a million times over and over.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 11:10 am / quote |
Rungej :
why even take the time to type if you're only going to whine and complain
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 12:05 pm / quote |
kaptink :
I really don't like Kev, I hope part of the storyline involves him being smooshed by a truck etc.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 02:18 pm / quote |
Xhinde :
Well there's certainly a pursuit of stereotypes here... this is junior high level writing at best.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 02:38 pm / quote |
 
 m 
  :
checked.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 03:38 pm / quote |
rokstar666 :
i didnt read it actually, but thats proly y i liked it??? dnt thnk 2 hard....
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 06:14 pm / quote |
-February-Star- :
Personally, I don't think this one is as good as Comeback Road, the writing style is too different and the details aren't well planned, descriptions are either lacking or seems to go on far too long.

Also, I noticed a considerable amount of grammar mistakes, which stick out like a sore thumb when reading the story.

However, still an entertaining read.

POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 07:07 pm / quote |
samerika :
me want more!
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 07:10 pm / quote |
Nolan Whyte :
Feb-Star: don't just say there are grammar mistakes. Point them out so I don't make them again.
POSTED: 10/19/2007 - 09:52 pm / quote |
rock_all_night :
I like it! It's interesting and real. You should totally publish it, but if you do... you might want to consider a different title, lol.
POSTED: 10/20/2007 - 01:05 am / quote |
TheUnholy :
hamish5178 wrote:

While I do enjoy reading this story (it's like porn, but with guitars!), I think the kids that commented calling him an awesome writer need to read more. . .



=)
Read my comments on episode one, and you will find that you and I are in perfect agreement. Well said.

POSTED: 10/20/2007 - 04:38 am / quote |
guitarkid2113 :
I like it.
POSTED: 10/20/2007 - 01:50 pm / quote |
Tab Guy :
cool
POSTED: 10/20/2007 - 06:39 pm / quote |
sum41freak8733 :
nolan whyte WTF IS WRONG WITH YOU publish this so when the power goes out at my house , i can read a book and not have to worry about the screen going black

POSTED: 10/21/2007 - 01:09 am / quote |
PunkRocker33133 :
Dude, great job whens the next part coming out?
POSTED: 10/21/2007 - 04:03 am / quote |
i suck :
slipnot does sound kind of like emo
POSTED: 10/22/2007 - 06:47 pm / quote |
Scourge441 :
Keep writing. If you stop, I'll kill you.
POSTED: 10/23/2007 - 04:19 pm / quote |
emosk8tborder :
I like this story, i was very interested when i read the first line. And i saw a comment someone wrote and i think this is what they said.....* 'emo' argument reminded me way too much of 13 year olds. It may be true, but it was pointless. This story is shit, seriously you must be like 12. mn was very well written and the person who worte * Heres a comment to a person who wrote this comment...You stupid. Not alot of 13 year olds turn Emo. This story is great, You need to get your eyes checked and maybe realize that this person who wrote this story is a Awesome writer. Anyways there ant nothing wrong with being Emo. I love Guys who wear eyeliner and wear tight jeans and their Hair in their face. Thats all i got to say
POSTED: 10/23/2007 - 05:43 pm / quote |
emosk8tborder :
another thing if you dont like this comment then email me or whatever K?
POSTED: 10/23/2007 - 05:47 pm / quote |
ATFN :
Thanks man. Like the idea that people should atlest care about something. Not just themselves!
POSTED: 10/24/2007 - 04:17 am / quote |
dan_d_superman :
interesting
POSTED: 10/24/2007 - 05:22 am / quote |
emosk8tborder :
Also wanted to add something to the first comment i made. Nolan.... Are you trying to say that being Emo is a horriable thing? I see guys who wear tight jeans and eyeliner everyday at my skool. there ant nothing wrong with being emo...
POSTED: 10/30/2007 - 04:03 pm / quote |
emr_steelmech :
"I'm not emo, you stupid *******! I'm goth."

POSTED: 10/31/2007 - 04:58 pm / quote |
nakki :
That was cool, thank you!

Keep it going! =)

POSTED: 11/04/2007 - 05:56 am / quote |
Burenen :
i remember being young and unintroduced to music still. very real. It was nice how you pointed out how intimidating picking up a guitar might be on how long it would take to learn those 3 chords "like 5 years maybe" lol. once again grand work.
POSTED: 11/08/2007 - 02:03 am / quote |
BennyStruggle :
"They are emo to the extreme-o."

haha I liked that. I also like how the characters that are deemed to be protagonists are anti emo. Although there is defence about the music genre, they strike me as the type that would make fun of all the wannabes that follow that FAD.

POSTED: 11/12/2007 - 12:08 am / quote |
Thadinator :
a big improvement over the first
POSTED: 11/23/2007 - 07:50 pm / quote |
krumpinjugger :
this storykicks ass!but slipknot sucks...
POSTED: 03/17/2008 - 03:45 am / quote |
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